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Wednesday, May 4, 2011
Imitation Poem
Shamu
In and out, you're massive body weaves Through the water, you give me hope and my heart cleaves To you like glue, and I begin to believe.
People look at you with dire, But I can't help it, I admire, You inspire.
This poem is fantastic! You were able to create a picture of this special subject in only six lines, that allowed the reader to be captivated by him just as you are. Like the other comments mentioned above, the second stanza really stands out, since it basically sums up your opinion of him in a way that is straight to the point and can get your true meaning across. Great job!
The last stanza grabs me. It is so...I don't know how to put it. Simple. Direct. Nicely worded!
ReplyDeleteI really liked this poem expecially the second stanza. The word choise was excellent which made the last stanza simple but very passionate.
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ReplyDeleteThis poem is fantastic! You were able to create a picture of this special subject in only six lines, that allowed the reader to be captivated by him just as you are. Like the other comments mentioned above, the second stanza really stands out, since it basically sums up your opinion of him in a way that is straight to the point and can get your true meaning across. Great job!
ReplyDeleteMay 5, 2011 5:08 PM
This poem is great, especially the rhyming scheme! Your word choice was also fantastic! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is wonderful! I love the rhyme scheme. Having every line in each stanza rhyme was a great idea. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteThis poem is great! i really like the way you rhymed. I also like your word choice and the way the poem flows.
ReplyDeleteWonderful! The rhyming flow of the poem really helped the reader envision what was going through your head. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great poem. It flows very well and the rhyming is very creative. Also, the simile-"my heart cleaves to you like glue"- is very creative.
ReplyDeleteThe rhyming scheme of this is great. It really flows and after you read it makes you think about it.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the last stanza it's short and to the point! Nice job on this imitation poem.
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