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Thursday, April 28, 2011
Rehab ("ABC" by Robert Pisky)
After buzz causes disorientation. Endless fear grasps humanity. Its jouney keeps lapsing muderious nature, oppressing public questions. Realing, sweating, trembling, unprotected, vonerable, weak. X-off your zeal
You can tell that nothing was forced even though yu had to imitate an ABC poem. Words like vulnerable show the reader from the outside what the character is going through. Great job.
This is great! ABC poems are very difficult to write but I think you did an amazing job. I really like the theme of this and description (sweating, trembling). I can picture it perfectly.
You followed the structure while keeping your theme/tone consistent. This could not have been an easy feat!
ReplyDeleteYou can tell that nothing was forced even though yu had to imitate an ABC poem. Words like vulnerable show the reader from the outside what the character is going through. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis is great! ABC poems are very difficult to write but I think you did an amazing job. I really like the theme of this and description (sweating, trembling). I can picture it perfectly.
ReplyDeleteHero, I like the observation you make. ABC poems are difficult to craft in a natural way. :)
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